LO4: Evaluation of the Script

The Brief

You have been asked by local community radio station, Sheffield Live!  to create a new and original radio show or drama.

You will create the first 5-10 minutes of the new radio show/ drama and include:

1. Presenters/ voice actors 
2. News bulletin
3. Feature/ interview/ narrative 
4. Jingle/ theme music 
5. Bedding music/ sound/ effects
6. Original advert
7. Competition/ social media links

I believe our script successfully met the brief as it followed all the conventions of a traditional sports show, whilst also adding a local twist, making it fit to use on Sheffield Live!. We featured original adverts from companies that are local to the radio station and also from larger companies with the same target demographic as Onside FM. As I have stated in my codes and conventions work my script includes all of the sections included above, meaning it fits with the usual format of a talk radio show.

Several drafts of the script were made to ensure that the final version was as close in quality and format to a professional script as possible. I have included examples of some of the feedback we received on our first draft, below.

 In total, we wrote two different drafts before we were happy with our script. The main issue with our first draft was how the text was separated. There wasn't enough back and forth conversation between the presenters, each presenter could be talking for around thirty seconds without a break. This ruined the flow of the show and made it hard to listen to so we decided to split the paragraphs up between the presenters as we thought this would keep the listeners' attention more. Secondly we needed to add our news section and our adverts into the script. Our first draft also wasn't formatted correctly and didn't feature any timings, so we corrected this in our second draft.

Our second draft, corrected the paragraphing issues from the first draft, we also formatted it to look like a professional script with timings. However, the news section we added was "unnecessarily long" so we needed to shorten this in our final version. There were also some issues with how some of the "transfer rumours" section was worded which made the script hard to follow and again negatively altered the flow of the show.

In our final version, we corrected the wording of the script and split up the paragraphs more so it flowed well. At this point, the script had been formatted correctly so it looked like a professional script. The final script can be seen below.

In conclusion, I feel that this final version of the script fits all the requirements stated in the brief. I feel it is clearly aimed at our target demographic and caters to them well. We didn't include a competition/giveaway in our radio script; however, I feel that this is the only element of the brief we did not complete. Despite this, I feel that myself and Josh have created a professional looking script that could be used to create a radio show.